Dear, Dennis Grajeda
I just wanted to take a moment to write thank you , thank you for everything that you have done to push and guide me to do the right things in life even though had persuasion to do things that were not relevant to living a good life. I was always doing the right things but it was obvious that I had minor distractions preventing me from proceeding doing productive things for my life. the purpose o this letter is to show my gratitude to show how grateful to have such a caring and great-directing mentor and brother. You always told me to do MY very best at anything to always push myself and never give up.
The biggest thing that my brother Dennis did for me was open my eye by not telling me what I've done right and wrong but he gives me an example of when he was younger. That's what I really respect that im not just another someone but I am someone to compare to. I'm not someone to look down to, someone who has made bad decisions but I am someone who has a chance, someone with options. Me and Dennis met at birth on July 21st 1994. That was the day I was brought into this cold directionless world. Also the day that I knew my eyes would be opened to a new direction and way of living life. Dennis would always give me examples on how some of the things I do such as leave some trash on the floor or table is a bad habit that if I start leaning it up that it can change how I do everything in positive ways.
As I was growing up Dennis was always I and out of my life because he was in the Marine corps. I was never really a bad child more or less a troubled one. Our family wasn't all together and financially we weren't doing that great. Dennis would always remind me to keep my head up and never think of the bad times as something that will continue that way but rather a obstacle in the way to make you fight harder to get out the struggle. He always pushed me to do good at absolutely everything I could do. If it was good it can be even better !
Dennis inspiration poem
from the day I was born
was the day that you sworn
to be my guardian
help me find myself again
if I was to ever get lost
you would be that light in the sky
that I have to follow
to take away my sorrow
and I knew that I could fly
or atleast imagine
with the intelligence I must barrow
to have a wider range of options
rather than
narrow
Genaro,
ReplyDeleteOk blog post. You seem to lose your letter in the second paragraph, when you stop addressing it to your brother. It shifts to a different narrative - you describing your relationship, but it falls out of being a letter. Try to keep consistent in your message/direction.
Also, you need to include at least 2-3 images or pictures per post. Tinker around with Blogger to figure it out. It's not hard to add an image from Google, or you can upload your own pictures. You will keep losing points if you do not include the images.
Your poem is a great start. It has a flow and is quite creative, but it is too short. Try to keep writing. This poem is about a third of the length that you could be writing.
Try to take more time on these assignments. They seem a little rushed through. Write more. Go nuts. Give it your all. Spill it all out and see what happens. Your grade will improve.
GR: 75